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Preliminary Thesis : Being a strong and a physically fit, sporty man defines masculinity.
I. Ad shows a man with a look of confidence that comes naturally with being a man.
A. eg: The ad shows a man running showing that he is physically fit and strong.
1. Strong physique (defined legs, thin fit body)
2. Shows him looking towards the distance and the confidence that comes with being a man.
II. Sporty look that a man should always have to be define as "the rock" type of masculinity.
A. eg. The ad shows the clothing the man is wearing loose-fit sweatershirt and shorts, with the advertised sneakers.
1. The wind blowing through his hair and on his clothing (refreshing him)
2. His clothes hanging loosely on him going fast down the path and his sneakers taking him far.
III. The background the man being outdoors, just running and being a man
A. eg. The background of the ad shows a green field just going by as he runs.
1. The ground moving fast underneath him
2. His sights set on the distance he wishes to go.
B. Analysis: The man is sporty which is the (the rock) kind of masculinity.
You have a good initial thesis and I really like your analysis of the thrid point, he setting of your ad. But I would suggest you rethink the first supporting point; the point should support your thesis rather than restate it. So maybe the first point, based on the further detail you provide, seems to focus on the model? The second point focused on the model's sporty clothing, right? Nice start.
ReplyDeletealso look for ways to describe the reason you think a muscular structure defines a man for instance being strong resembles recognition,and health.
ReplyDeleteGood point I will change my first point Ms.B
ReplyDeleteand Guadia I'll look in to that more thank for the advice.